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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby bochen777 » Tue 28 Mar 2017, 09:20:45

Nature abhors nothing at all , there are no highest order directive , you conflate physical laws with the divine
crystallization , chemistry and biological life is a MINIMIZATION of entropy by making stable structures



This is not true. Life is organized only at the expense of dispelling more entropy to the system as a whole.
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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby sparky » Tue 28 Mar 2017, 09:34:55

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entropy is the dilution of energy , structures hold it off (for a while)
life , crystals and gravity create structures which do not disperse but hold on this energy potential until it doesn't

quartz , the planets and my own humble self are a transitory check to the pervasive local undifferentiated potential
and then we shall no more
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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby aldente » Sat 27 May 2017, 00:47:21

I guess that certain "held back" characters still outlive phantasies of the future by default:

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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby aldente » Mon 05 Jun 2017, 03:42:12

the pic was a joke- I am neither a "witness", nor a Adam Smith extension
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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby aldente » Mon 05 Jun 2017, 03:50:13

aldente wrote:the pic was a joke- I am neither a "witness", nor a Adam Smith extension
and no - there is no way to deceive death.

question:

Supposedly the jackal in ancient Egypt was the god of mortality.

Well - who please then is the god of - IMMORTALITY- ???

(this is for the pseudo- trans humanists to answer)

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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby SeaGypsy » Mon 05 Jun 2017, 04:26:43

Easy, the Sun.
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Re: Can someone help critique my writing?

Unread postby aldente » Mon 05 Jun 2017, 04:45:43

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